基础写作讲评课：句式的灵活运用 教学设计

基础写作讲评课句式的灵活运用教学设计广东第二师范学院番禺附属中学高三英语梁惠玲一.教材分析本次基础写作讲评课使用的教材是2010年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试（广东卷）英语基础写作要求写一篇关于中国政府决定禁烟的报道基础写作满分15分，其中语言方面满分为8分语言方面最高档的评分标准如下具有很好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性高，词汇方面使用较好，只有少许错误因此，学生要拿高分，必须在语言运用方面下功夫而适当运用名词性从句、定语从句、含有非谓语结构的句子、强调句、倒装句、被动态句子等句式能充分展现考生的语言运用能力由此可见，基础写作中句式的灵活运用十分重要二.教学对象分析学生上讲评课之前已完成了2010年广东高考有关政府禁烟的基础写作从写作情况来看，学生能做到审题和写全要点，会运用连接词，能尝试使用所学句式；但句式简单，语法错误明显针对学生写作情况，本节课的学习目标定位为如何把简单句子转变为高级句子（即漂亮句子），做到句式的灵活运用三.教学目标

（一）认知目标

1.学生能理解以下高级句式及其各自的优点1）含有名词性从句的句子巧用名词性从句可令句式灵活多变，能够润色文章；2）含有定语从句的句子使句子的信息容量大，句子结构紧凑、连贯；3）含有非谓语结构的句子使文章简洁、精炼；4）强调句加深印象，丰富句式；5）倒装句增强句子表现力；6）被动态句子避免句式单一.学生能懂得欣赏范文并能指出其亮点或不足；.学生能明白运用句式应注意下列三点1）应关注高考评分标准，恰当把握好句子的复杂程度；2）适当运用含有非谓语结构的句子、复合句、倒装句、强调句、被动态句子等，句式丰富能充分展现考生的语言运用能力；3）采用多种句式表达同样的信息，句式不同表达效果也不同，应根据具体需要选择恰当的句式

（二）能力目标1）学生能够运用语法知识更正错误句式，并懂得避免双谓语、句子成分不完整、误用倒装句、生搬硬套句式，提高其分析、判断、正确使用不同句式的能力2）学生学习写作高级句式，做到一句多变，灵活运用各种句式表达同样意思，拓宽其创新思维，提高其实际写作能力

（三）情感目标1）结合禁烟内容使学生明白吸烟的危害及禁烟的必要性，增强学生关注健康，拒绝吸烟的意识2）通过句式多变激发学生的学习兴趣，焕发其积极参与课堂活动的热情通过各种练习令学生体验到灵活运用句式，一句多变的乐趣和成功感，培养其对写作的喜好3）通过小组活动提高学生的合作意识和互帮互助、共同进步的意识四.教学重点

1.学习含有名词性从句的句子、含有定语从句的句子、含有非谓语结构的句子、强调句、倒装句、被动态句子等不同高级句式及其各自的优点；2分析、判断并更正错误句式，明白运用句式时应避免双谓语、句子成分不完整、误用倒装句、生搬硬套句式；

3.学会灵活、恰当运用各种句式，做到一句多变五.教学难点如何做到句式的灵活、恰当运用六.教学策略以小组合作学习的形式开展课堂活动教师采用启发式教学策略，精讲多练，鼓励学生主动参与课堂学习，积极探究、发现和解决问题七.教学媒体acomputerandablackboard八.教学步骤Stepl:Revisionandwarmingupl.Theteachershowssomepicturesandtalkswiththestudents.T:WhatarethepicturesaboutSs:Aboutsmoking.T:Yes.Infacttheyareaboutbanningsmoking..Revisionofthebasicwriting:HowtoorganizetheinformationTheteachershowsthebasicwritingaboutbanningsmokingandaskthestudentstoorganizetheinformationasthefollowing.1）中国大约有

3.5亿人吸烟，其中男性75%女性25%.2）受二手烟影响的人数约

5.4亿，而且每年有超过10万人因二手烟死亡3）中国政府决定从

2011.LL起全国范围内禁止在公共场所吸烟4）到时，政府会张贴一些禁烟标志5）大家一起行动，我们才能使所有室内公共场所无烟Getthestudentstoreadthefivesentencesabovetogethertomakesurethattheyunderstandwhattheyshouldwriteabout..Showthestudentstheadvantagesanddisadvantagesoftheiressaysandtodaystask.Advantages:能审题；能写全要点；会运用连接词；能尝试使用所学句式Disadvantages:句式简单语法错误明显OurTaskToday Wearegoingtolearnhowtowritebeautifulsentences.Step2:Groupwork.Analysethefollowingsentences.Herearesomesentenceswrittenbysomeofyou.DoyouthinktheyarebeautifulsentenceswhyThisdecisionwhichaimstomakeallindoorpublicplacessmoke-freewillbecarriedoutfromJan.l

2011.（区锦汶）TheChinesegovernmenthasdecidedthatsmokingshouldbebannedinallindoorpublicplacesalloverthecountry.（黄俊涛）Therearearound540millionpeopleaffectedbysecond-handsmokecausingmorethan100thousanddeathseveryyear.（梁巧诗）Notonlyare540millionpeopleaffectedbysecond-handsmokebutalsoover100thousanddeathsarecausedbysecond-handsmokeeveryyear.（陈俊伟）ItisalloverthecountrythatthegovernmentwillforbidsmokinginallindoorpublicplacesfromJanuary1st

2011.（霍柳婷）No-smokingsignswillbeputupinallindoorpublicplacesinordertoachievethisgoal.（梁秋仪）Aftergroupwokasksomestudentstotellwhytheythinkthesentencesarebeautifulsentences.Sentence1:运用定语从句，使句子的信息容量大，紧凑连贯；Sentence2:使用名词性从句，令句式灵活多变，润色文章；Sentences运用非谓语结构，使文章简洁，精炼；Sentence4:巧用倒装结构增强句子的表现力；Sentence5:使用强调句加深印象，丰富句式；Sentence6:使用被动态句子，避免句式单一Afterthataskthestudentstosumupwhatarebeautifulsentences（seetheabove）.Step3:Groupwork.Herearesomemoresentenceswrittenbysomeofyou.CorrectthesentencesfromNo.ltoNo.4andtellwhethersentence5issuitableornotforthisbasicwriting.Accordingtothesurveythereare350billionpeoplesmokeinChinaofwhom75%aremenwhile25%arewomen.Theaimisthatallindoorpublicplacesfreeofsmoke.Letsdoittogethercanwemakealltheindoorpublicplacesfreeofsmoke.ThedecisionwhichwillbecarriedoutfromJanuary

12011.TheChinesegovernmentcannotemphasizetheimportanceofbanningsmokingalloverthecountryfromthefirstdayof2011toomuch.Aftergroupworkgetsomestudentstocorrectthesentencesandtellwhethersentence5issuitableornotforthisbasicwriting.Afterthattheteacheraskthestudentstosumupwhattheyshouldavoidwhenwritingsentences.句式方面应避免的错误.避免双谓语，应注意主句或从句都只有一个谓语；.避免句子成分不完整，特别应注意定语从句删去后，剩下部分必须是完整句子；名词性从句应为完整句子，句子语序要用陈述语序；3避免误用倒装句，应记住倒装句需满足一定的条件；.避免生搬硬套句式，应注意语言的得体性Step4:Groupwork.Analysethefollowingessaywrittenbyonestudentintheclass.TheChinesegovernmenthasdecidedtobansmokinginpublicplacesacrossthecountry.Thisdecisionwhichaimstomakeallindoorpublicplacessmoke-freewillcomeintoeffectfromthefirstdayof

2011.Statisticsshowthatthereare350millionsmokersamongwhom75%aremenand25%arewomen.Around540millionpeopleareaffactedbysecond-handsmokewhichcauses100thousanddeathsperyear.Andnowinordertoachievethisgoalno-smokingsignswillbeputupinallindoorpublicplaces.（凌子瑜）T:DoyouthinkitisagoodessayWhyPleaseunderlinethebeautifulsentencesandtellwhyyouthinktheyarebeautiful.CanyouchangethesentenceswhichyoudontthinkarebeautifulsentencesStep5:WritebeautifulsentencestogetheraccordingtotheChinese..中国大约有

3.5亿人吸烟，其中男性75%女性25%.Thereare350millionsmokersinChina.75%ofthemaremenand25%ofthemarewomen.（请把以上两个简单句子合并成为一个包含有介词+which/whom的定语从句）Thereare350millionsmokersinChinaof/amongwhom75%aremenand25%arewomen..受二手烟影响的人数约

5.4亿，而且每年有超过10万人因二手烟死亡Around540millionpeopleareaffectedbysecond-handsmokeandmorethan100thousandofthemdieeachyear.1）请把以上句子改写成为包含有which引导的非限制性定语从句的句子Around540millionpeopleareaffectedbysecond-handsmokewhichcausesmorethan100thousanddeathseachyear.2）请把以上句子改写成为包含有非谓语结构的句子Around540millionpeopleareaffectedbysecond-handsmokecausingmorethan100thousanddeathseachyear.3）请把以上句子改写成为包含有Notonly...butalso…的倒装句Notonlyarearound540millionpeopleaffectedbysecond-handsmokebutalsomorethan100thousandpeoplediebecauseofsecond-handsmokeeveryyear..中国政府决定从

2011.

1.

1.起全国范围内禁止在公共场所吸烟TheChinesegovernmenthasdecidedtoforbidsmokinginpublicplacesalloverthecountryfromJanuary1st

2011.1）请把以上句子改写成为包含有Itis…that…的强调句ItisfromJanuary1st2011thatTheChinesegovernmenthasdecidedtoforbidsmokinginpublicplacesalloverthecountry.2）请把以上句子改写成为包含有宾语从句的句子，可适当变换单词，意思保持不变TheChinesegovernmenthasdecidedthatsmokingshouldbebannedinindoorpublicplacesacrossthecountryfromJanuary1st

2011.3）请把以上句子改写成为包含有定语从句的句子，可适当变换单词，意思保持不变Ourcountryhasbeguntocarryoutthepolicywhich/thatpreventspeoplefromsmokinginpublicplacessinceJanuary1st201L4）请把以上句子改写成为包含有同位语从句的句子，可适当变换单词，意思保持不变OurcountryhasbeguntocarryoutthepolicythatsmokerswillbestoppedfromsmokinginpublicplacessinceJanuary1st

2011.5）请把以上句子改写成为包含有由which引导的非限制性定语从句的句子，可适当变换单词，意思保持不变Thegovernmentsdecisionwhichwillcomeintoeffectfromthefirstdayof2011aimstomakeallindoorpublicplacesfreeofsmoke..到时，政府会张贴一些禁烟标志Signswillbeputuptoforbidsmoking.请把t转换成短语最黄它表达，使句子更高级Signswillbeputupinordertoforbidsmoking.Signswillbeputupsoastoforbidsmoking.Signswillbeputupwhoseaim/purposeistoforbidsmoking.Signswillbeputuptheaim/purposeofwhichistoforbidsmoking.Signswillbeputupfortheaim/purposeofforbiddingsmoking.请把原句转换成为以Thereasonwhy开头的句子Thereasonwhysignswillbeputupistoforbidsmoking..大家一起行动，我们才能使所有室内公共场所无烟Wecanmakeallindoorpublicplacesfreeofsmokeifeveryonetakesaction.请把以上句子改写成为以Only开头的句子Onlyifeveryonetakesactioncanwemakeallindoorpublicplacesfreeofsmoke.Afterthataskthestudentstocombinethefivesentencesintoanessay.Asisreportedtherereabout35miHionsmokersinChinaofwhom75%aremenand25%arewomen.Around540millionpeopleareaffectedbysecond-handsmokecausingmorethan100thousanddeathseveryyear.ThereforeItisfromJanuary1st2011thattheChinesegovernmenthasdecidedtoforbidsmokinginpublicplacesalloverthecountry.Bythensignswillbeputupforthrpurposeofforbiddingsmoking.Onlyifeveryonetakesactioncanwemakeallindoorpublicplacesfreeofsmoke.Getthestudentstoreadtheessayaloud.Thentheteachergivessomesuggestionsonhowtowritebeautifulsentences.句式方面的建议1•关注高考评分标准，恰当把握好句子的复杂程度；.适当运用含有非谓语结构的句子、复合句、倒装句、强调句、被动态句子等，句式丰富能充分展现考生的语言运用能力.采用多种句式表达同样的信息，句式不同表达效果也不同，应根据具体需要选择恰当的句式Step6:GroupworkConsolidationbyhavingacompetitionLetshaveacompetition.Pleasetranslatethefollowingsentenceusingasmanykindsofsentencepatternsasyoucan.Thegroupwhocanwritedownthemostsentencescorrectlyinfiveminutesmayhavegifts.我会改善公共至通，让出行更舒适便捷9012年广州二模参考词，匚出行gettingaround公共交通publictransportationsystemsampleversions:1I11expandthepublictransportationsystemwhichwillmakegettingaroundmoreconvenientandcomfortable.2111expandthepublictransportationsystemwhoseaimistomakegettingaroundmoreconvenientandcomfortable.11expandthepublictransportationsystemmakinggettingaroundmoreconvenientandcomfortable.11expandthepublictransportationsysteminordertomakegettingaroundmoreconvenientandcomfortable.5ItisthepublictransportationsystemthatI11expandsoastomakegettingaroundmoreconvenientandcomfortable.6Onlyifthepublictransportationsystemisexpandedwillwemakegettingaroundmoreconvenientandcomfortable.I11expandthepublictransportationsystemandgettingaroundwillbemademoreconvenientandcomfortable.8WhatI11expandisthepublictransportationsystemwhichwillmakegettingaroundmoreconvenientandcomfortable.Step7:Sumupthelesson.Todaywehavelearntwhatarebeautifulsentencesandhowtocorrectmistakensentences.Mostimportantlywelearnhowtowritebeautifulsentences.Ihopeyoucanbenefitfromthislessonandtrytowritebeautifulsentencesfromnowon.BesidessinceyouhaveknowntheharmofsmokingIthinkyouwillnotsmokerightStep8:HomeworkassignmentFinishthefollowingbasicwritingaboutthesafetyofschoolbuses.2012年湛江一模基础写作【写作内容】近日，校车安全已成为了一个严重的问题，并得到人们越来越多的关注你们班同学就其造成的原因及解决方法进行了讨论，结果如下主要原因

1.超载

2.超速

3.安全意识淡薄主要解决的方法

1.学校及幼儿园加强校车安全检查.阻止危险车辆上路.重视安全教育以提高安全意识【写作要求】

1.以上述信息为材料写一段五句话的短文；

2.句子结构准确，语言表达流畅、连贯【评分标准】概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯Step9:Feedbackandevaluation1）个人自评表（满分18我的总分是）2）组内成员互评表（满分24）说明很好二6分好二4分不太好二2分不好二0分这节课后，我…Excellent（+6分）Good（+4分）Soso（+2分）Bad（0分）能说出今天学的高级句式的种类；能改正错误句子；能灵活运用不同句式写出高级句子组内成员互评表评价人时间合作活动组员姓名行为表现总分参与意识明确责任倾听并尊重他人向他人提供帮助。