读后续写练习写作导学案--2025届高三英语上学期一轮复习写作专项

读后续写练习写作导学案阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文I was a vetin Yorkshire.One dayI receiveda callfrom Mrs Tompkin askingme to cut（虎皮鹦鹉）（喙）her budgiesbeak.1dropped whatI wasdoing immediately,armedmyself witha pairof clippersand steppedonto thenarrow strip of pavement whichseparated thedoor from the road.A pleasantlooking red-haired womananswered myknock.Tm Mrs Dodds nextdoor//she said/1keep aneye onthe old lady.Shes overeightyand livesalone.”Chatting with me friendly,she ledme into the crampedlittle room,and saidto theoldwoman ina corner/Heres MrHerriot comingto seePeter foryou//Mrs Tompkinnoddedand smiled/Oh thatsgood.The poorlittle fellacan hardlyeat withits longbeakand Imworried abouthim.Hes myonly companion,you know.”Yes,I understand,Mrs Tompkin/l lookedat the cage by the windowwith thegreen（栖息）budgie perchedinside.These littlebirds canbe wonderfulcompany whentheystart chatteringShelaughed./zYes,but itsa funnything.Peter neverhas saidthat much.I thinkheslazyiBut I just likehaving himwithme.“Of courseyou do/71replied patiently/zbut hecertainly needsattention now.”The beakwas greatlyovergrown,curving awaydown tillit touchedthe feathersofthe breast.I wouldbe able to revolutionizehis lifewith onequick snipfrom myclippers.The wayI wasfeeling thisjob wasright upmy street.I openedthe cagedoor andslowly insertedmy hand.“Come on,Peter,,,l wheedled（哄骗）.Lifting himout,I huntedin my pocket with theother handfor theclippers,and thenstopped.The tinyhead wasno longerpoking cheekilyfrom myfingers buthad fallenlooselyto oneside.The eyeswere closed.He was dead.Suddenly,we hearda noisein the forest.Anxiously,we listenedand staredinto thedarkness.A jeepappeared.A foresterspotted thelight from the fireand came to haveacheck.We jumpedinto thewarm vehicleand the forester droveus tohis station,wherewe weregiven clothes and wereabletocall ourparents.Steve and I hadmany morecampingadventures from then on,but it was onthis tripthat Stevebegan totreat memorelike afriend andequally,rather thana youngercousin.Our friendshipcontinues tothisday.Mrs Doddsand Istared ateach otherin horror.When Iturned myhead towardsMrs TompkinJ wassurprised to see thatshe was still noddingand smiling.I drewher neighborto oneside.Mrs Dodds,how muchdoes shesee Ohshesveryshort-sighted,but shesright vaindespite herage.Never wouldshe wearglasses.Shes hardof hearing,too//Well,look,,zl said.My heartwasstillpounding.Ijustdont knowwhat to do.If Itellher aboutthis,the shockwill beterrible.Anything couldhappen/7Mrs Doddsnodded witha sadface.Z/Yes,youre right.Shes thatattached to the littlething.”注意续写词数应为左右150Paragraph1:Suddenly itoccurred tome that I couldbuy hera newbird in the nearbystore.___Paragraph2:It was a longtime beforeI daredto goback toMrs Tompkinsto seehow shegotalong withthe newb ird._____________________________________________

一、厘清文本内容，明确语篇主题

（一）原文要素When OnedayWhere inYorkshireat Mrs Tompkins homeWhoMrsTompkin,Mrs DoddsIWhat I was askedtocuta budgiesbeak butI bundthe budgiewasdead.How Idecided tobuy hera newbudgie.

（二）原文主题本文讲述了一位兽医被叫去为一位独居老人的虎皮鹦鹉剪喙的故事兽医发现这只虎皮鹦鹉事实上已经死了，但是因为老人的视力和听力都欠佳，所以她并未发现为了不让老人失去她唯一的伙伴，兽医决定不告诉老人真相，还要为她买一只相似的虎皮鹦鹉故事体现了对老人和弱势群体的关爱

二、品读原文经典，领悟动作描写

（一）精选动词，力求精准描述[仞1]larmedmyself witha pairof clippers.我准备好了一把剪子[例2]Ikeep aneye ontheoldlady.我照看着那位老太太【例】3Ihuntedin mypocket withthe other handforthe clippers.我用另一只手在口袋里找剪刀【例】4My heartwas stillpounding.我的心还在狂跳评析与点拨根据人物所处的环境和性格特点，选用准确恰当的动词能把人物刻画得活灵活现，同时也能让读者在具体的语境中体会到夸张或幽默等表达效果如果上面四个例子中的四个粗体动词（词组）分别用prepared lookafter lookedfor来替换，各个句子就会变得平平淡淡，读起来索然无味从应试的角度来beating看，准确地选用动词，能体现考生的语言水平，是作文获得高分的基础要准确地选用动词，通常需要运用具体动词替代笼统动词请体会下表中左右两列动词在表达准确性方面的差异General words（笼统动词）Concrete words（具体动词）（咬）、（咀嚼）、（吞下）eat bitechew swallowcryweep/sob（啜泣）（闲聊）、（耳语）say/talk chatwhisper（瞥见）、（怒视）、（凝视）look glanceglare stare（猛冲）run dasli/rush（蹑手蹑脚地走）、（漫步）、（齐步走;行进）、tiptoe wandermarchwalk（阔步走）stride另外，运用恰当的短语替代普通动词也是常用的技巧之一请体会下表中左右两列在表达效果方面的差异Single words（普通动词）Proper phrases（恰当短语）cry burst into tearsrememberkeep...in mindseecatch sightofattract appealtodecide makeup onesmindstart/begin getdown todoing

（二）添加状语，实现生动描写[例5]Chatting withmefriendly...和我友好地聊着天……【修|]6]“Of courseyou do’T repliedpatiently/zbut hecertainly needsattentionnow//“你当然喜欢，〃我耐心地回答，“但他现在肯定需要照顾〃[例7]I openedthecagedoor andslowlyinsertedmy hand.我打开笼子的门，慢慢地把手伸进去[例8]MrsDoddsandIstared ateach otherinhorror.多兹太太和我惊恐地面面相觑评析与点拨利用副词、介词短语等状语来修饰动词，能表现动作发生的状态、程度、方式等特点，也能让读者产生画面感例句中的粗体状语能更好地体现出人物的性格品质和内心活动，这对塑造人物形象、主题升华都有重要的作用我们在平时的学习中，要有意识地积累地道的修饰语并分类整理，建立自己的语言素材库比如，在描写动作的快速、短暂时，我们可以选用下列修饰语、rapidly、、、、、immediately speedilyswiftly instantlypromptly hastily^without pausingin no等time inan instantwithout delay

（三）细化动作，写出连动过程【彳列】9I droppedwhatI wasdoing immediately,armedmyself witha pairofclippers andsteppedontothe narrowstripofpavementwhichseparated thedoor fromtheroad.我立刻放下手头的工作，拿起一把剪刀，踏上了那道门与路之间的狭长人行道【例10]Chattingwith mefriendlysheledme into the crampedlittle room,andsaidtozthe oldwoman ina corner,Heres MrHerriot comingto seePeter foryou.”她和我友好地聊着天，把我领进那间狭窄的小房间，对角落里的老妇人说“赫里奥特先生来看彼得了〃【例11]lopenedthe cagedoor andslowlyinsertedmy hand.我打开笼子的门，慢慢地把手伸进去【彳列12]Liftinghim outjhuntedinmypocketwiththeotherhandfor theclippers,and thenstopped.我把他抱了出来，另一只手在口袋里找剪刀，然后停了下来评析与点拨空洞、笼统的动作描写无助于人物形象的塑造事实上，不管是简单还是复杂的动作都不是一下子就能完成的我们若能进行细致观察，就能捕捉到一连串细微的动作我们应把最能体现人物特征的连续动作提炼出来并形成动作链，写出具有连贯性的动感画面，使人物形象更生动、立体连动的描写可以是最简单的两个动作的描写（如例）用〃的句式；也11,“A andB可以是三连动（如例）使用〃的句式；甚至可以是更多个动作连续发生，9,A,Band C使用〃的句式另外也可以借助分词作状语的手段来描写A,B,C,…andX（如例、例）使用主干”或主干1012,doing/having done...++doing...and doing...”的句式当然这些都是基本的句式结构，在实际使用中可以有更灵活的变化，还可以加上必要的形容词或副词来修饰，从而写出更细腻的动作，使动作描写更有层次感和画面感

三、做针对性练习，提升专项技能请根据中文意思，在下列句子的空格处填上合适的单词或短语.妈妈睡着以后，他从后门溜了出去1After hismother fellasleep,he outby theback door..他嘀咕道她怎么敢！〃2“How dareshe!he..他突然大哭起来，气呼呼地跑了3He andstormed off..狼没有动，默默地瞪着我4The wolfdidnt move,..她拖着脚，不情愿地跟在她的父母后面5She herfeet asshe followedher parents..那个猎人手里提着枪冲进了树林6The hunterdashed into theforest,..她冲上前去，跪在地上，把儿子抱在怀里7She dashedforward,and gatheredher soninto herarms..那个歌手看了观众一眼，深吸了一口气，开始唱歌8The singerat theaudience,and beganto sing..他们站在空旷的路旁，仰望天空，感受着内心珍贵的平静9beside theempty road,they lookedup intothe sky,feeling theprecious peacefromwithin..贝贝垂着胳膊，坐在池边，不知道自己是对还是错10With hisarms7Beibei satbeside thepool,whether hewasright orwrong.【参考范文】学习下面的参考范文，体会文中的动作描写Paragraph1:Suddenly itoccurred tome thatI couldbuy hera newbird in the nearbystore.MrsDodds alsothought itwasagood ideaand evensuggested onein thetown.lcalmeddown,clearedmy throat,andinformedMrs TompkinthatIwas goingto takePeteralong tothe surgerytodothe job.llefther stillnoddingand smilingand,cage inhand,fled intothe street.I soonfound theshop andluckily therewasagreen budgieinthe shop.With thebird in the cagejspedbackandhungit inits placeby thewindow.zzlthink youllfind everythingis wellnow/l toldMrsTompkin.Paragraph2:It wasa longtime beforeI daredto goback toMrsTompkinstoseehow shegotalong withthe newbird.The oldlady herselfcame tothedoor//How...,,lstammered//How is...er...,,Shepeered atmeclosely fora momentandthen laughed.zzOh,you meanPeter.He isjust grand.Come inand seehim/ln thelittleroom thecage wasstill hungbythewindow andPeter theSecondhopped aroundthebarsof thecage,running upand downhisladder.His mistressreachedup,tappedthemetal andlookedlovingly athim.zzYou know,you wouldntbelieve it/she said/Hes likeadifferent bird/l swallowed.Is thatso Inwhat wayWell,hes soactive nowandevenchattersto meall daylong.Its wonderfulwhat cuttinga beakcan do.”【跟踪导练】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文Steve wasthe mostamazing personin allof Minneapolis,and hewas mycousin.Bythe ageof

19.Steve wasa starbaseball playerat theUniversity ofMinnesota.!wanted tobeexactly likehim.So whenSteve askedmetogo withhim ona springfishing tripinnorthern Minnesota,!was excited!After planningthe trip,we gatheredclothesandsupplies,and beganour greatadventure.We reachedthe SuperiorNational Forestin northernMinnesota byearlyevening.On ourway tothe campsite,Steve pointedto afaraway smallhouse inone ofthemountains,saying thatitwasthe forestersstationwhere theforester worked.Finally,after along walk,we reachedthe campsiteand setup thecamp asthe sunwassetting.Steve knewall thetricks ofan experiencedwilderness camper.After wegatheredenough woodfromtheforest,he startedthe campfireusing onlystone andsteel—no matches.For supper,we feastedon freeze-dried beef,wild riceand peasoup.Iate greedilyafter allthat work.Tired enough,we climbedinto oursleeping bagsearly andtalked aboutour plansforfishing thenext day.We werestill talkingquietly whena suddennorth windpickedup;the temperaturedropped andit beganto snow.Steve founda wayto increasethetemperature insidethe tent.He draggeda logfromtheforest tothe oppositeside ofthecampfire.Then hewrapped aluminumfoil aroundthe log.The heatfromthefirereflected offthe foiland intothe tent.Soon,images oflake fishwere fillingmy dreams.The snowhad stopped,but sometimelater apowerful windmust havekicked uptheflames ofour dyingfire.Iwasabruptly awakenedby Steve.Our tentwas onfire.FrightenedJ ranout of the tentimmediately.The tentcollapsed withSteve inside.注意续写词数应为左右，尽量用到上文提到的动作描写的技巧150Paragraph1Without anythought ofendangering myself,I rushedintotheburning tentandpulled Stevetotheicy lake.________________________________________Suddenly,we hearda noisein theforest.________答案做针对性练习，提升专项技能

1.slipped

2.murmured

3.burstintotears

4.glaring atme silently

5.dragged;reluctantly/unwillingly

6.gun inhand

7.knelt down

8.glanced;took adeep breath

9.Standing

10.drooping;wondering跟踪导练Paragraph1Without anythought ofendangering myself,I rushedintotheburning tentandpulled Stevetotheicy lake.Fortunately,we werenot seriouslyhurt.Later,as westoodby theburning tentto keepwarm,we consideredour difficultsituation.Our campsitewasinthedeep oftheforest,really faraway fromthe highway.We wereinthemiddleof nowhere,wearing onlyunderwear,with oursupplies burntinto ashes,including ourcellphones.Even Stevewas unsurewhat todo next.The onlything wecould dowas justsitinthecold airand wonderhow toget outoftheforest.。