高中以读促写作业单对社会有突出贡献的人物｜人与社会｜记叙文｜教师版

高考阅读「以读促写」学习单人与社会——对社会有突出贡献的人物教学目标1）通过阅读对社会有突出贡献人物相关的文章，引导学生总结归纳描写对社会有突出贡献的人物的词汇和句式2）根据情境需要，帮助、指导学生运用所掌握的关于对社会有突出贡献的人物的词汇、句式和语篇知识写出有关采访人物的作文2019年北京卷B篇Alice Moore is a teenager entrepreneur（创业者），who inMay2015set upher businessAilieCandy.By thetimeshe was13,her companywas worth millions of dollars withthe inventionof asuper-sweet treatthat couldsavekids teeth,instead ofdestroying them.It allbegan whenMoore visiteda bankwith her dad.On theouting,she wasoffered acandy bar.However,her dadreminded herthat sugarytreats werebad forher teeth.But Moorewas sickof missingout oncandies.Soshe desiredto get round the warning,Why cantI make a healthycandy thatsgood formy teethso thatmy parentscantsay noto itWith thatin mind,Moore askedherdadif shecould starther own candy company.Herecommended that she do some research and talk to dentists about what a healthier candy would contain.With herdads permission,she spentthe nexttwo yearsresearching onlineand conductingtrials toget arecipethat wasboth tastyand tooth-friendly.She alsoapproached dentiststo learnmore aboutteeth cleaning.Consequently,she succeededin makinga kindof candyonly using natural sweeteners,which canreduce oralbacteria.Moore thenused hersavings toget herbusiness offthe ground.Afterwards,she andher fathersecured theirfirstbusiness meetingwith asupermarket owner,who finallyagreed tosell Mooresproduct-Cancandy.As CanCandy9s successgrows,so doesMoores credibilityas ayoung entrepreneur.Moore isenthusiasticabout the candy shecreated,and shesalso positiveabout whatthe futuremight bring.She hopesthat everykid canhavea cleanmouth anda broadsmile.Meanwhile,with herparents9help,Mooreisgenerally ableto livea normalteenage life.Although shefoundedher companyearly onin life,she wasntdriven primarilyby profit.Moore wantsto useher unique talent tohelpothers findtheir smiles.She donates10%of AilieCandysprofits toBig Smiles.With hertalent anddetermination,it appearsthat thesky could be the limit for Alice Moore.课前探索（-）自主摘录重点单词、短语、美句，写出阅读过程中遇到的问题，选择最佳标题WordsPhrases Sentences,approach dentistHe recommended that shedo someresearch andtalk•be sickof,miss outon,consequently todentists aboutwhat ahealthier candywould,getroundthewarning•succeed incontain.,say noto,get herbusiness offthe Consequently,she succeededin makinga kindof,recommend candyonly usingnatural sweeteners,which canground,tooth-friendly reduce oral bacteria.•be enthusiastic aboutWith hertalent anddetermination,it appearsthat thesky couldbe thelimit forAlice Moore.OutstandingPeopleDifficulties TitleChoosethe suitabletitle forthe passage:A.Alice Moorehelps otherswith theirlife.B.Alice Mooreand HerAilieCandyC.How CanCandywas inventedD.Dads assistancein settingup businesswiththe kid

（二）梳理文章结构，寻找或总结段落主题句，填空完成思维导图-1开篇（Para.1）人物向介）Alice Mooreset up a businessworthmillions ofdollars.p-How didthe ideaof healthiercandy occurto Alice、—How didAlice inventthe newcandy正文（Para.2-Para.5）事业的建立和发展一，—The businessof Alicestarted.The businessof Alicesucceeded.-（结尾（Paia6）成功后的生活）the lifeafter hersuccess

（三）教学参考提问学生如果你打算采访一位我国的名人，你准备如何谋篇布局？读写结合-微写作练习话题词汇从文本中找出和对社会有突出贡献的人物有关的词汇和短语1人物性格be sickof,be enthusiasticabout,be positiveabout,say noto sth.2与发明相关的词汇:do someresearch,research online,conduct trials,get arecipe,approach dentists,succeed in3事业发展set up ones business,start onesowncandycompany,be worthmillionsofdollars,get onesbusinessoff theground,business meetingwith asupermarket owner4人物评价:ateenagerentrepreneur,be drivenby profit,uniquetalent,donate,determination逻辑词从文本中找出使文章前后连贯的词汇和短语1表因果consequently,so2表转折however,but3表时间:afterwards,then,meanwhile话题句型从文本中找出和主题相关的写作金句1Consequently,she succeededin makinga kindof candyonly usingnatural sweeteners,which canreduce oralbacteria.【佳句提炼】句子的主干是she succeededin makinga kindof candy,which canreduceoralbacteria作定语从句，修饰candy,usingnaturalsweeteners作定语，修饰candyo【佳句翻译】因此，她成功地用天然甜味剂制作了一种糖果，可以减少口腔细菌【佳句仿写】Alice创建了一家公同生产对牙齿无害的糖果，这为社会做出了巨大贡献Alice setsupanew businessmaking tooth-friendly candies,which contributesa lotto society.2He recommendedthat shedo someresearch andtalk todentists aboutwhat ahealthiercandywouldcontain.【佳句提炼】句子的主干是He recommended,that shedosomeresearchandtalktodentistsaboutwhatahealthier candywouldcontain作宾语从句,是虚拟语气【佳句翻译】他建议她做些研究，并与牙医讨论健康糖果的成分【佳句仿写】他的母亲建议他通过向不同的人学习来开阔视野His motherrecommendedthat he broadenhis horizonby learningfrom differentpeople.3With hertalent anddetermination,it appearsthat thesky couldbe thelimit forAlice Moore.【佳句提炼】句子的主干是it appears,that theskycouldbethelimitforAliceMoore作表语从句with hertalent anddetermination作状语【佳句翻译】以她的才华和决心，似乎一切都是可能的【佳句仿写】凭着自信，似乎她能征服整个世界With confidence,it appearsthatshecould conquerthe world.-链接高考2015年安徽卷某英文杂志正在举办以“Fancy yourselfas aninterviewer”为主题的征文活动，请你以“A FamousChinese IWould Like toInterviewv为题，写一篇英语短文内容包括

1.采访的对象；

2.采访的原因；

3.想提的问题注意1,词数120左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3.短文中不能出现与本人相关的信息；

4.短文的标题已给出，不计入总词数【思路点拨】四格法写作米访原因The person I would like to interview is Yang I would really like to interview him because he isLiwei.not onlythe firstChinese togo tospace butalso one ofthe greatestastronauts in the world.I have采访对象long beeninterested in space explorationand Ibelieve Ican learn agreat dealfrom himabout it.—关系不亲近+不平等人称第一三人称二-------------总结气虚拟想提的问题In myopinion,the interviewmust be instructive If I could interview him,I wouldask himwhatinspiring.made him an astronaut and how he was trained.I wouldalso liketo know how he felt inspace andwhetherspace travelis suchgreat funas I have read.【参考范文】A FamousChinese IWouldLiketo InterviewThepersonI wouldliketointerviewisYangLiwei.I wouldreallyliketointerviewhimbecauseheisnot onlythe firstChinese togo tospace butalso one of thegreatestastronauts inthe world.Ihavelong beeninterested inspace explorationand Ibelieve Icanlearna greatdealfrom himabout it.IfIcouldinterviewhim,Iwouldask himwhat madehimanastronautandhowhe wastrained.Iwouldalsolike toknowhowhefeltinspaceand whetherspace travelis suchgreat funas Ihave read.In myopinion,theinterview mustbeinstructiveand inspiring.

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①②课后巩固（―）拓展练习改编自新人教选择性必修一Unit1People ofAchievement（Using language第四部分）我们周围有很多了不起的人物，请从以下几方面来介绍一位你钦佩的人要点

1.人物简介；

2.人物事迹；

3.钦佩原因人物简介人物事迹The manI admire mostis Peng Shilu,who isHe respondedto thecall of the PartyCentralacknowledged asoneofthe pioneersand foundersof Committeeand activelydevoted himselfto theChinasnuclear power field.Throughout his life,he development of Chinasnuclear submarinein

1950.was enthusiasticabout the development of Chinas Whats more,he wasresponsible forthe introductionnuclear submarine andmade outstandingand constructionoftheDaya Bay Nuclear Powercontributions to it.Plant.【思路点拨】四格法写作关系不亲近+不平等人称第一三人称时态一般现在时一般过去时钦佩原因So Iregard PengShilu asmy rolemodel./In anutshell,he setsa goodexample tous teenagers.He appearedwherever themotherland neededhim,which weshould learnfrom.As youngadults,it isour commitment to dedicate ourselves to the developmentofour countryjust likehim.【参考范文】The manI admireTheman TadmiremostisPengShilu,who isacknowledged asoneofthe pioneersand foundersof Chinasnuclearpowerfield.Throughout hislife,he wasenthusiasticaboutthedevelopmentofChinasnuclear submarineandmade outstandingcontributionstoit.He respondedto thecall ofthe PartyCentral Committeeand activelydevoted himselfto thedevelopment ofChinasnuclearsubmarinein

1950.Whatsmore,he wasresponsibleforthe introductionand constructionof theDayaBayNuclearPower Plant.In anutshell,he setsa goodexample tous teenagers.He appearedwherever themotherland neededhim,which weshould learnfrom.As youngadults,it isourcommitmenttodedicateourselvesto thedevelopmentofour countryjust likehim.So Iregard PengShilu asmy rolemodel.―美又欣赏2021浙江卷A篇Leslie Nielsenschildhood wasa difficultone,but hehad oneparticular shiningstar inhislife—his uncle,who wasa well-known actor.The admirationand respecthis uncleearned inspiredNielsen tomake acareer职业in acting.Even thoughhe oftenfelt hewould bediscovered tobe ano-talent,he movedforward,gaining ascholarshiptotheNeighborhood Playhouseand makinghis firsttelevision appearancea fewyears laterin

1948.However,becoming afull-time successfulactor wouldstill bean uphillbattle foranother eightyears untilhelanded anumber offilm rolesthat finallygot himnoticed.But eventhen,what hehad wasntquite whathe wanted.Nielsen alwaysfelt heshould be doing comedybuthis goodlooks anddistinguished voicekept himbusy indramatic roles.It wasntuntil1980-32years intohiscareer-thathelanded therole itwould seemhewasmade forin Airplane!That movieled himinto thesecond halfofhis careerwhere hiscomedic presencealone couldmakeamovie afinancial successeven whenmoviereviewers wouldnot rateit highly.Did Nielsenthen feelcontent inhis careerYes andno.He wasthrilled tobedoingthe comedythat healwaysfelt heshould do,but evenduring hislast fewyears healways hada senseof curiosity,wondering whatnewrole orchallenge mightbe justaround thecorner.He neverstopped working,never retired.Leslie Nielsensdevotion toacting iswonderfully inspiring.He builta hugelysuccessful careerwith littlemorethan plainold hardwork anddetermination.He showedus thateven asingle desire,never givenupon,canmake fora remarkablelife.【参考译文】Leslie Nielsen的童年是艰难的，但他的生活中有一颗特别闪耀的明星一一他的叔叔，他是一位著名的演员叔叔赢得的钦佩和尊重激发了尼尔森在演艺界的职业生涯尽管他经常觉得自己没有才华，但他还是继续前进，获得了邻里剧场的奖学金，并在几年后的1948年首次在电视上露面然而，接下来的八年，成为一名一线演员仍然是一场艰苦的战斗，直到他获得了一些最终让他受到大众注意的电影角色但即便如此，他所拥有的也并不完全是他想要的尼尔森一直觉得他应该拍喜剧，但他的美貌和杰出的声音让他忙于扮演戏剧角色直到1980年一一在他职业生涯的第32年一一他饰演了电影《飞机》中一个似乎是为他量身定做的角色！那部电影使他进入了他职业生涯的后半段，即使影评人对这部电影评价不高，但仅凭他的喜剧表现就可以使电影获得经济上的成功尼尔森对自己的职业生涯感到满意吗？正反两面都有他很高兴能出演他一直觉得自己应该做的喜剧，但即使在他最后几年，他也总是有一种好奇心，想知道即揩到来的新角色或挑战他从未停止工作，从未退休Leslie Nielsen对表演的热爱非常鼓舞人心他只是凭借普通的努力工作和决心，就建立了一个非常成功的职业生涯他向我们表明，即使仅仅凭借一个永不放弃的愿望，也可以成就非凡的生活。