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阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文Being atrain driver,I mustconcentrate onmy drivingwhen working.And onthatparticular day,I wasglad formy outstandingattention.From adistance,I spotteda smallfigure likea thinkid on the traintracks.Immediately,I rangthe alarm,but noresponse.Observing carefully,I sawa boylying onthe tracks,unable toescape frommy train,as his foot was stuck.I pulledthe brakeswith allmy mightassoon asI could.Luckily,the trainstopped a few inchesfrom the boy,who wascryingloudly infear.I approachedhim,asking howhe feltand whetherI couldgive ahand.After gettinghispermission,I cautiouslychecked howhis footwasstuckin thetracks.And afterafewpulls,the boy*sfootcame outfinally.Hugging him and makingsure everythingwas okay,Iasked whetherI neededto callhis parents.To myastonishment,the childsaid nothing,justlooking at me with his tearfuleyes.Considering itwas dangerousto leavethe boyalone,Idecided totake him to my home afterwork.Arriving atmyhome,I introducedhimtomy wife,Amelia.She lookedat thechild insurprisefor awhile,but shecalmed downquickly andasked whethertheboyrememberedher.The boynodded.Amelia explainedto methat shehad justwalked outof thesupermarketwith somebread andvegetables theother day,when agroup ofbad guysblockedher way.Just then,a littleboy rantoward themand screamedto attractthe police,which atlast savedher.Here stoodthe braveboy.In thefollowing hours,we chattedwith eachother,and thuswe knewthat thekid wasnamedTom and he was abandoned by his parentsand becamean orphanwho hadbeenalone onthe streetsfor years.As wedidnt haveany children,we weredetermined to adoptTom.注意
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答I toldTom ourdecision,waiting forhis answer.The nextmorning,we openedour bedroomdoor andsaw Tomstanding there.身为火车司机的“我〈在工作时发现铁轨上有个小男孩,他的脚被卡住“我”紧急刹车后救下了他,并将其带回了家妻子Amelia认出他是曾救过自己的勇敢孩子交谈后得知男孩叫Tom,是被父母遗弃的孤儿,“我们”决定收养他,故事在此处续写,展现Tom对“我们”收养决定的反应以及之后一家人的生活,突出善良和爱的传递能温暖人心、改变命运的主题故事分析•伏笔与回应i.伏笔“我”在铁轨上看到小男孩时,他的脚被卡住无法逃脱,营造出紧张危险的氛围,凸显情况危急回应“我”尽全力刹车并成功救下男孩,为后续故事发展奠定基础,展现“我”的善良和责任感,引出后续一系列情节,如带他回家、决定收养等,推动故事向前发展ii.伏笔Amelia讲述被一群坏人拦住时,小男孩出现并尖叫吸引警察救了她,这一情节为小男孩的勇敢善良形象做铺垫,也解释了为什么Amelia对他有特别的情感回应在得知小男孩是孤儿后,“我们”决定收养他,不仅是因为同情,更是因为他之前的善举,使收养行为更加顺理成章,也升华了善良有报的主题,丰富了故事的情感层次iii.伏笔小男孩被父母遗弃成为孤儿,在街头流浪多年,这一背景为他渴望家庭的情感做了铺垫,也使“我们”的收养决定更具意义回应当“我们”告知他收养决定时,他的惊喜和感动充分体现了他对家庭的渴望,回应了前文的伏笔,展现了亲情的珍贵,进一步突出了故事温暖人心的主题iv.伏笔“我”发现小男孩后,不仅救下他,还考虑到他的安全带他回家,表现出“我”的善良和细心回应这种善良的举动持续发展,最终促成了“我们”收养他的决定,也为后续家庭生活的温馨和睦埋下伏笔,使故事的情感发展连贯自然,强化了善良能带来幸福的主题V.伏笔在得知小男孩的经历和他救过Amelia后,“我们”内心已经有了收养的想法,这为后文正式做出收养决定做了铺垫回应“我们”明确告知小男孩收养决定,他的积极回应开启了一家人幸福生活的新篇章,使故事的情节完整,主题得到深化,体现了爱与善良能创造美好家庭的寓意・续写要点i.第一段I toldTom ourdecision,waiting forhis answer.Toms eyeswidenedin disbelief,and thenfilled with tears ofgratitude.He stammered,Really Youwant meto beyour child”I nodded,and Ameliahugged himtightly.Tom sobbed,Ive alwaysdreamed ofhaving afamily.Thank you!We spentthe restof the evening talkingabout ourfuture together,andToms facewas litup withhope and happiness.ii.第二段The nextmorning,we openedour bedroomdoor andsaw Tomstanding there.He hada bigsmile onhis faceand washolding aplate offreshlymade sandwiches.I wantedto makebreakfast formy new family/he saidshyly.We weredeeply touchedby histhoughtfulness.From thatdayon,Tom becamean importantpart ofour lives.He wasa brightand lovingchild,and ourhome was filled withlaughter andwarmth.We knewthat thiswasthe beginningof abeautiful journeytogether,and wewere gratefulforthe chanceto giveTom thelove andfamily hedeserved.・情感线起初,“我”看到男孩在铁轨上时紧张担忧;救下男孩后关心他的状况;妻子Amelia看到男孩时惊讶,后因认出他而感慨;得知男孩是孤儿后,“我们”心生怜悯与同情;决定收养他时充满慈爱与期待;告知男孩决定后,他惊喜感动;第二天早上看到Tom准备早餐,一家人温馨幸福,情感变化丰富,突出了善良与爱的力量,使故事温暖感人・故事线i.“我”在铁轨上发现被卡住的男孩,紧急刹车救下他ii.带男孩回家,妻子Amelia认出他是救命恩人iii.交谈中得知男孩是孤儿,“我们”决定收养他iv.告知男孩收养决定,他欣然接受v.第二天早上男孩准备早餐,一家人温馨和睦vi.续写部分,一家人开启幸福生活•主旨升华句i.Love hasthe powerto healthe deepestwounds andcreate unbreakablebonds.(爱有力量治愈最深的创伤,建立牢不可破的纽带)ii.In thedarkest cornersof life,a singleact ofkindness canbe thelight thatleadsto a new beginning.(在生命最黑暗的角落,一个小小的善举可以成为通向新起点的光)iii.Sometimes,the mostprecious giftscome inthe formof unexpectedencountersand thechoice toopen ourhearts.(有时,最珍贵的礼物以意想不到的相遇和敞开心扉的选择的形式出现)iv.The kindnesswe showto othersis likea seedplanted inthe soilof life,whichwill growinto atree of love andshelter.(我们对他人表现出的善良就像播撒在生命土壤中的种子,它将成长为一棵爱与庇护的树)v.When wechoose loveand compassion,we not only changethe livesofothers but also findthe truemeaning andbeauty ofour own.(当我们选择爱与同情时,我们不仅改变了他人的生活,也找到了自己生活的真正意义和美好)写作示范第一篇I toldTom ourdecision,waiting forhis answer.Tom stoodthere,stunned fora moment.Then,a hugesmile spreadacross hisface,andhelunged forwardto hugus both.Yes!Iwant tobe partof your family morethan anything,he exclaimedthrough histears.Weheld himclose,feeling asense ofjoy andpurpose.That evening,we talkedabout ourhopesand dreams,and Tomshared hislove fordrawing and his desireto goto school.Wepromised tosupport himin everyway.The nextmorning,we openedour bedroomdoor andsaw Tomstanding there.He wasneatlydressed,andhishair wascombed.In hishands,he helda smalldrawing hehad madeforus duringthe night.It showedourfamily,holding handsand smiling.HI madethis foryou,he saidsoftly.We weredeeply movedbyhisgesture.From thatday on,Tom fitintoour livesseamlessly.He wasa sourceof laughter and love,and wewere gratefulfor thechanceto givehimahome.We knewthat ourlives hadbeen foreverchanged bythis braveandkind-hearted boy,and welooked forwardtoafuture filledwith happinessandtogetherness.举一僮弟一^扁I toldTom ourdecision,waiting forhis answer.Toms eyeswelled upwithtears,and henoddedvigorously.Pve alwayswanted afamily.Thank youso much/1he whispered.Wecould seethe reliefandhappinessin hiseyes.We spenttheeveningmaking plansfor hisroomand discussinghis favoritethings.Tom toldus abouthis adventuresonthestreets,and welistened attentively,sharing inhis joysand sorrows.The nextmorning,we openedour bedroomdoor andsaw Tomstanding there.He hadprepareda simplebreakfast oftoast andjam,with aglass oforange juice.nI wantedto dosomethingnice formy newparents/he saidwith ashy smile.We satdown togetherand ate,enjoying thewarmth ofthe moment.As thedays passed,Tom thrivedin ourcare.Hestarted schooland madefriends quickly.Our homewasfilledwithhislaughterandthesound ofhis footsteps.We realizedthat byopening ourhearts toTom,we hadreceived apreciousgift inreturn.Our storywasatestament tothe powerofloveand kindness,and wehopedto sharethis messagewith theworld.参考答案I toldTom ourdecision,waiting forhis answer.Tom staredatme,with amix offeelings—shock,delight,or somethingelse.Amelia couldntwait tosay ina softandsweet voice,“Tom,I loveyou andI needyou.I couldfeel hisstruggle,so Ismiled athimand huggedhim gently.Knowing itwas hardfor himto acceptthe wholething ina flash,Isuggested agood nightto thinkit over.The nextmorning,we openedour bedroomdoor andsaw Tomstandingthere.Beingsomewhat embarrassed,he tookone ofmy hands,“You wontabandon me,right”Inodded firmlyand promisedthat wewould treathim asour own,without cheatingorabandonment.On hearingthis,he huggedboth ofus tightly,saying affectionately,Dad!Mom!”Later,he jumpedand ranfull ofjoy,“I haveanewfamily!I haveDad andMom!Iam nolonger anorphan.You see,love cannotonlymake someonea day,butalsomakestrangers anewfamily.。
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