13 出游见闻 2021年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国版）

13出游见闻2021年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）相关话题素材储备和写作指导有关旅游的话题多种多样，可以是外出野营、游览风光、出国游学、交流访问等等，体裁形式也可以各不相同“出游见闻”属于事件描述类，所见所闻都应当以具体事件的措述来呈现，大部分是记叙文，也有部分是夹叙夹议，对所见所闻发表感想下面就以记叙文为例来详解如何写好这类文章实践案例题目Write acomposition inat least60words onnA special trip”.（写篇题为“次特殊之旅”的短文，字数不得少于个词）60作为初中生，你肯定已经有过旅行的经历哪次旅行是让你至今不忘、印象深刻的呢发生的什么事情使得这次旅行如此特殊请具体描述，与大家分享这篇全命题文章要求学生能够写出一-次旅行，并且要突出其“特殊”之处，那么就不能泛泛而谈某次旅行风景秀丽、文化多元等，而是要将这次旅行所发生的（特殊）事情通过叙事手法具体描述出来，因此可以确定这篇文章是记叙文体裁确定以后，文章就好写了，选取旅行中一次特殊经历，交代清楚事情发生的前因后果，不要忘记文章最后要有感情上的升华就这篇文章面言，可以写一写这次特殊旅行带给你的经验、教训、感悟等段落结构根据题目要求，可以参考以下结构进行写作:第一部分The1st part开篇点题I had a special trip which1still rememberclearly.Among all the travellingexperiences,the tipto.was the most specialone第二部分The2nd part描述次特殊的旅行，语言生动，重点突出其特殊之处1had the trip with..when.During the trip to....some specialevents happened.第三部分The3rd part这次旅行对你产生的影响等From thisspecial tip,1realize/learn thatThisspecial tripwas unforgettableand meaningfulbecause itnot onlyenabled me to enjoy..but alsotaughtme..核心语汇名胜古迹places ofinterest观光胜地tourist attraction景点scenic spots去观光go sightseeing当地人the local/locals当地文化和习俗local cultureand customshowrespect to1respect thelocal…尊重当地的.・…一次有趣又有意义的旅行an excitingand meaningfultrip地标建筑landmark building享受自然风光enjoy thenatural scenery欣赏人文风情appreciate thehuman landscape印象深刻又令人难忘impressive andunforgettable参考句型It isexciting for me/1am excitedto havea trip to.•去・・・•旅彳亍我很兴奋使得这次旅行如此特殊It is...that makesthe tripso special.,……从这次特殊的旅行中我学到，我应I learnfrom the specialtrip that Ishould Onlyafter thespecialtripdid Irealize这次特殊旅行后我才意识到.…that....直到旅行结束我才意识到…Not untilthetripcame toan enddid Irealize..正是这次特殊之旅教会我….It was thespecialtripthattaught meto习作1A specialtripOne of the mostimpressive tripsfor mewas theone tothe cityof Ningbo.Unlike anyother city,!didnt need to worry about the dangerous carsthere.Whenever1was tryingto cross the road,allthedrivers wouldpolitely waitbecause ofthe rule of pedestrainsfirst.Therefore,it wasthe perfecttraffic that made thetrip veryspecial and I rallythought the traffic inmy cityshould beimprovedlike this,which woulddefinitely reducethe numberof trafficaccidents.点评该生审题有误，内容及体裁上均有不当之处首先从内容上讲，与其说这篇文章的主题是“一-次特殊之旅”，不如说是介绍“一座特殊之城”，因为文章没有通过事实来描述某次旅行的特殊之处，而是对宁波这座城市的特点泛泛而谈，而且，学生所提到的“交通秩序好”并没有用有效的语言描述成非常特殊的方面其次从体裁上讲，这篇文章不能算作是记叙文，没有特定事件的描述，这也是明显不符合题目要求的但该生在语言方面的表现还是可取的，比如运用强调句、定语从句等，词汇方面也较为地道流畅如果内容的选取上没有失误就更好了，可见认真审题的重要性修改稿A specialtripOne ofthemostimpressive tripsformewastheone tothe cityof Ningbo.I rememberwhen I was about to crossthe streetand lookingaround forthe traffic,a kinddriver stoppedhis businfront ofme andwaved hishand toshow methat Icould gofirst.How surprisedI was!I noticedthe passengerson hisbusdidnt showannoyance butwaited formetocrossthestreet,too.Later,I learned that everyonein Ningbowas afirmsupporter ofthetrafficruleofpedestrians first.Indeed,I didntneedtoworryaboutthedangerouscars inthis city.Therefore,it wasthe perfecttraffic thatmade thetrip veryspecial and I reallythought thetraffic inmy cityshouldbe improvedlike this,which woulddefinitely reducethe numberof trafficaccidents.习作2Last year,my familyhadatriptoa remotemountain areafor itsunique naturalbeauty.lt turnedouttobe veryspecialfor me.When wewalked alongthe narrowroad,we cameacross alittle girlwho keptstaring atour camera,so Ioffered totakea photofor her.She agreedwith greatjoy,and askedif Icould sendthe phototo herfather whoworked ina farplace.I didwhat sheexpected meto doand shethanked memany times.As forme,I feltextremely happytoo.It wasthis incidentthatmadethetripso special,and Ilearnedthat helping othershelped megain happinesstoo.点评这篇习作对主题的把握是比较到位的，通过去年一次乡村之旅期间发生的一件小事，来突出这次旅行的特殊之处:予人玫瑰，手有余香对该事件的叙述也是清晰流畅，简洁明了从语言上看，该生会用、turn outcome等表达，会用强调句、定语从句等，都是有助于提高分数和档位的方法和手段，值得大家借鉴across相关话题范文解析

（一）为丰富初三学生课余生活，上周末你校组织了一次社会实践活动请根据以下内容提示，用英语写一篇短文，介绍此次活动，并谈谈自己的感想活动内容上午游览人民公园欣赏美景、歌舞联欢、拍照留念;

1.下午参观市民广场观看图片展，了解祖国和家乡年巨变

2.70你的感想.师生情深，感谢老师和同学的帮助；

1.倍受鼓舞，决心勤奋学习报效祖国；2（考生自己发挥）3……要求词数左右开头已给出，不计人总词数

1.100所写内容必须包括内容提示中所提供的信息，并可作适当的发挥

2.不得出现真实的人名、校名、地名等相关信息

3.参考词汇市民广场Civic SquareIn order to enrich Junior3students1after-school life,our schoolorganized asocial practiceactivity lastweekend.Allthe teachers and studentsof ourgrade tookpart init.【写作思路】这是一篇材料作文，根据材料中的相关信息介绍一下上周末你校所组织的一次社会实践活动所提供的材料中列举了活动内容和你的感想主要从上午游览人民公园欣赏美景、歌舞联欢、拍照留念；下午参

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2.观市民广场观看图片展，了解祖国和家乡年巨变以及表达师生情深，感谢老师和同学的帮助；倍受鼓舞，70决心勤奋学习报效祖国；（自己在发挥一些）这几个方面去介绍时态为一般过去时，人称为第一人称注意作文中必须包含材料上的所有信息，并适当发挥写作时，避免使用汉语式的英语,尽量使用我们熟悉的句子或短语语法要正确，表达要符合英语习惯，注意时态、时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系，表达具有条理性【参考范文】InordertoenrichJunior3students1after-school life,our schoolorganized asocial practiceactivity lastweekend.Allthe teachers and studentsof ourgrade tookpart init.In themorning,we visitedthe PeoplesPark.In thepark,we enjoyedthebeautiful scenery,danced andsang,and tookpictures.I would like tothank myteachersandclassmates fortheir help.In theafternoon,we visitedthe CitizensSquare.In PeoplesSquare,we watchedthe photoexhibition andlearned aboutthe great changes of our country andhometown in the past70years.After seeingthese photoexhibitions,Iwasinspiredand determinedto studyhard toserve mycountry.【名师点评】【高分句型一】我要感谢我的老师和同学们的帮助该句话用到I wouldlike tothank myteachersandclassmates fortheir help.了丰富了语言wouldliketo dosth.【高分句型二】In PeoplesSquare,we watchedthe photoexhibition andlearned aboutthegreatchangesofourcountryand在人民广场，我们看了年来的摄影展，了解了祖国和家乡的巨大变化该句话hometown in the past70years.70的语言简练，层次分明，语意明确，用简单的句子表达了丰富的内涵使人读起来朗朗上口相关话题满分作文必背-近几年，旅游已经成为一项全民活动初中生们旅游的机会也有很多，因此，旅游也是初中生们津津乐道的话题你的美国朋友非常喜欢中国文化，去年暑假你和他一起从桂林出发去北京旅游了几天，你们Tom参观了一些著名景点，还品尝了一些有名的小吃，请把你们的旅游经历写成一篇不少于词的短文80参考范文A Tripto BeijingMy Americanfriend TomandIwent to Beijing byplane lastsummer.On thefirst day,we visitedthePalace Museumand TiananmenSquare.The nextday,we climbedthe GreatWall.We tooklots ofphotos.Althoughwe felttired,it wasa fantasticexperience.The thirdday werelaxed.Then wehad theBeijing roastduck forlunch.I thinkitis themost deliciousfood inthe world.Tom isinterested inChinese culture,so wedrank teaand sawBeijing OperainLao SheTeahouse inthe evening.Finally,we didsome shoppingand flewback toGuilin.The triptoBeijingwas short,but itwas wonderful.Tom saidthathewould neverforget it.

（二）假如你参加了学校组织的“走近乡村”寒假社会实践活动请根据要求，向某英语网站投稿，分享活动经历要求词，可适当发挥，开头已给出，不计入总词数；L80〜120文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称

2.参考信息:Have youever gotclose tothe countrysideand hada specialexperience Letme sharemine!【写作思路】本文属于一篇图表作文，根据表格提供的信息来介绍“走近乡村”寒假社会实践活动的经历人称为第一人称，时态主要为一般过去时动笔前先要注意认真阅读材料确定写作内容；文章必须包括要点中所给的信息，既要写活动的过程，又要总结活动感受与收获并补充两条个人的观点表达要符合英语习惯，注意时态、时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系，表达具有条理性多种句式交叉使用来丰富文章的文采高分句型l.We experiencedthe lifeinthe countryside,learned somethingthat我们经历了农村的生活，学到了一些我们以前从书中得不到的东西we couldnt get from books before.that we是定语从句，修饰不定代词couldnt getfrom booksbefore.something

2.We reallyhope wellhave anotheractivity like我们真的希望今年寒假还能有这样的活动!后面是省略的宾语从句that thiswinter vacation!hope that【参考范文】Have youever gotclose tothe countrysideand hada specialexperience Letme sharemine.During thewinter vacationmy classmatesandIjoined inthe schoolactivity Getclose tothecountryside”.We liveinthe farmershomes.Their greatliving conditionssurprised usa lot.Do youknow wherevegetables comefrom Wegot theanswerwhen workingwith the farmers.Besides,we learnedabout otherplants andsome farmanimals.How interesting!We experiencedthe lifeinthecountryside,learned somethingthat wecouldntgetfrombooksbefore,and feltthewonderful changesofthecountryside.We realizedhow hardthe farmersworked anddecided tosave food.We werehappyto seethefarmers,life wasgetting betterand better.We reallyhope wellhave anotheractivity likethat thiswinter vacation!。