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2025届武汉市高中毕业生四月调研考试读后续写--消失的Artie无声的守护,温暖的惊喜读后续写阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文I hurriedinto Lehmansgrocery store.I wasthere tobuy mygrandmothers hearingaidbatteries.More importantly,this wasmy chanceto visitthe loveof mylife—Artie.I ranto theshelf he was on,and therehe was,right whereI lastsaw him:a greylittleguy with a largemouth thatfit perfectly over my shoulder as I huggedhim tightly.I adoredthatstuffed dolphin.As Iheld Artie,Mrs.Lehman,who hadalways beenkind to me,passedby andsmiled knowingly,Hugging thatdolphin again,huh”But mybrother,Rick,noticed Itook along timein Lehmans,saying,“You are athirteen-year-old girlnow.You aresupposed tobe quicker.Next time,I willgo withyou,Oh,great!My brother,Rick.He alSwoa,ys laughedat me.But Iwouldnt giveup.as wewalked into the store,I suggestedto Rickthat hegetthe batteries,since he was older.Then Iheaded towardsArtie.There hewas,awaiting me.Igrabbed himand huggedhim tightly.Just then,I heardRick saying,“What inthe worldareyou doing”u“This isArtie/I said.\hug himevery singletime Icome here.I cantafford itso Ihopehe doesntget soldbecause Ijust lovethis littleguy,The lookon Ricksface wasunreadable,but Iknew deepdown thathe wasntgoing tomake funof me.In fact,a fewtimes whenheaccompanied meto Lehmans,he said,go onand hugyour dolphin,if itsstill there.One day,Rick wasnot home,so I went toLehmans alone.Iwentstraight toArties shelf.But hewas gone.I searchedevery shelfbut couldntfind him.Suddenly,a voicefrom thecount注er意in terruptedmy search.续写词数应为左右;1,150请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答
2.It was Mrs.Lehman herself.To mysurprise,I founda boxlying on my bed.人物分析“我”性格特点充满童真,情感细腻对的喜爱是纯粹而执着的,每次都要去拥抱人物成长通过这次经历,她对哥哥的感Ar情tie有了更深的理解,从只看到哥哥的嘲笑,到发Ar现tie哥o哥隐藏在背后的爱哥哥性格特点表面上有些爱捉弄人,总是嘲笑妹妹对玩偶的喜爱,但实际上非Rick常关心妹妹他会注意到妹妹对的感情,并且默默地为妹妹买下玩偶,给她一个惊喜,这展现了他内心的细腻和对妹妹深Ar沉tie的爱人物转变从一开始在妹妹眼中只是个爱嘲笑她的形象,到最后揭示出他的善意和爱心,这种形象的转变丰富了人物性格,让读者看到他淘气表象下的温柔一面情节分析开端故事开始于一家杂货店,岁的女孩匆忙进入杂货店,表面上是为祖母买助听器电池,实际是想看望她心1爱3的填充海豚玩偶Lehm在an这s里,我们了解到女孩对的痴迷,每次来店都会紧紧拥抱它同时,女孩的哥Ar哥tieo也被引入情节,他对女孩A在r杂tie货店花费时间过长有所抱怨,并且会嘲笑女孩,这为兄妹R间ic略k带矛盾的关系做了铺垫发展有一次女孩独自去杂货店时,不见了她焦急地四处寻找,询问店员也无果,这o种失去心爱之物的焦虑和绝望情绪逐A渐rt加ie深这个情节转折推动故事向更紧张的方向发展,也为后续的高潮部分埋下伏笔高潮女孩怀着沉重的心情回到家,在卧室里发现了一个盒子,打开后看到了并且读到哥哥留下的纸条,才知道是哥哥买下给她的惊喜这个情节不仅是A情rti节e,上的高潮,也是Ri主ck题揭示的关键时刻哥哥看似爱嘲A笑rt妹ie妹的形象在这里发生反转,展现出他对妹妹深深的爱结局哥哥探头进房间询问女孩是否喜欢礼物,女孩冲过去紧紧抱住他,之前的伤心和误会在这一刻烟消云散Rick主题分析这个小故事告诉我们,尽管兄妹之间可能会有日常的小摩擦和误解,但亲情的本质是爱,这种爱能够在关键时刻消除隔阂,给彼此带来力量同时,也不再仅仅是一个玩偶,它成为了兄妹之间情感的象征,见证了他们之间深沉而真挚的A爱rtie续写内容分析这次续写部分的第一段,我觉得是有一定开放性的为了衔接第二段,第一段要写点什么呢?我们知道第一段的第一个场景肯定是和聊天su,rp所ri以se这里Mrs.除了告知海豚被买走,能不能告诉我是买走Mr的s.呢Le?hm(a可n能性
①)我认为是可Lehman Rick以的,因为文章中提到,所以哪怕被告知是哥哥买的,我也是不太相信的,这样将信将疑“看H到ea床lw上ay的s l礼au物gh,ed也a是t m会e感到惊讶的即使我相信了,但是看到自己床上存伞礼物心连是会惊讶吧(不过这个情节可能不太符合官方思想)那可不可以写u Mrs.没有告知我是谁买走的呢?当然可以,这样做的背后原因可以是为了配合给Lehman Rick我一个惊喜(可能性
②),也可以是因为她并不明确是我的哥哥(但是,我认为老板不Rick知道我们关系的概率不大,毕竟文章中我们一起去买了好几次电池),还可以处理成没有告知我是谁买走的,但是伤心的我回到家看到了Rick,他露出一个神秘的微M笑rs,.L让e我hm进an卧室瞧一瞧,于是就看到了惊喜(可能性
③)在我阅卷的过程中,三种情节有,后面两种占主流,也更加符合主流第二段和主题升华,大部分同学都抓到了作文范文没有告知我买走了Mrs.Lehman RickArtie It wasMrs.Lehman herself.She gaveme ansympatheticlook and said/Sorry,dear.That stuffed dolphin was sold.My heartsank.Ithanked hermechanically anddragged myfeet outof thestore.On theway home,memories ofhuggingArtie floodedmy mind.Every timeI buriedmy facein hissoft fur,I felta senseofcomfort andhappiness.Now,hewasgone,and Ididnt knowhow todeal withthis emptiness.When Igot homeJ sawRick inthe livingroom,but I was tooheartbroken toeven sayhello.Ijust walkedstraight tomy bedroomand closedthe doorbehindme./When Igot home,I sawRick inthe livingroom.Before Icould turnaway,he gaveme amysterioussmile thatmade mestop in my tracks.Go checkyour bedroom,he said,his eyestwinkling.With amix ofsadtnoe.sTsoamndy scuurrpiorsisiety,,IIfosulonwdlay bmoaxdleyimngyownamyytobethde.bedroom,wondering whathewasup Curiositygot thebetterof me,and I opened it.Inside wasArtie,looking exactlythe sameas ever.A pieceof1paper flutteredout.I pickedit upand read,“Little sister,this isfor you.-Rick/Just then,Ricknpeeked his head intothe room.Do youlike it”he asked,a bitnervously.I rushedoverimmediately;and huggedhim tightly.Thank youso much!I thoughtId losthim forever.Atthat momentI realizedthat behindhis teasingwords andmischievous looks,Rick hadalwayscared aboutme deeply.That stuffeddolphin wasntjust atoy;it wasa silentwitness totheunique andpre告ci知ou我s lovebe买tw走ee了n us.Mrs.Lehman RickArtieIt wasMrs.Lehman herself.She lookedat mewith agentle smileandsaid,“I knowyourelooking foryour Artie,dear.Your brothercame herea fewdays ago.He saidhe wantedtosurprise you,so hebought thatstuffeddolphin/My eyeswidened indisbelief.Rick,whoalways seemedto teaseme,had donethis forme Mrs.Lehman continued,“He toldme how1much youloved thatdolphin,and hedidnt wantyou tobe sadif someoneelse boughtit/1mfeyltasurrupsrhisoe,fIwfoaurmndthaibnosxidleyimngeo.Intmhaynbkeedd.Mrs.Lehman andrushed home,eager tosee Rick.ToOn topof thebox wasa notethat read,“For mylittlesister,whos nevertoo oldto lovea stuffeddolphin.-Rick.With tremblinghands,I openedthebox.There wasArtie,looking asadorable asever,withasmall bowtied aroundhis neck.Justthen,Rick peekedhisheadintotheroom.Do youlike it”he askedshyly.I ranover andgavehim abig hug,tears ofjoy inmy eyes.Thank you,Rick.This meansthe worldtome,Fromthat dayon,Artie satonmy bedside,not justa stuffeddolphin,but asymbol ofmy brotherslove.范文:ItwasMrs.Lehman herself.She spokegently,“I guessyou arelooking forthe stuffed1dolphin.Im sorry,but itwassoldearlier today/My heartdropped.I stoodfrozen foramoment,unable toprocess herwords.I hadhoped somuch thathe wouldstill bethere,waiting forme.Slowly,I walkedback home,trying hardto holdback thetears.When Igot in,Iwasunable tocontain mydisappointment andsadness anylonger.I rushedinto myroomwith Tteoarmsyroslulirnpgridseo,wInfomunydchaebekoxs.lying onmybed.Out ofcuriosity,Iopenedit.Amazingly,inside wasArtie!I huggedit indisbelief,its mouthagain restingperfectlyovermyshoulder.The familiardolphin wasinmyhands again.At thismoment,I heardRicks voicefrom thedoorway.couldnt lethim slipaway,he said,grinning,So,I boughtArtie foryou;.A waveofwarmth washedover measIrealized whathe haddone.In hisown quietway mydearbrother hadgiven methe greatestgift.。
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