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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文Beyond theHorizonOshima wassitting at the seaside butthe beautifulsite didnot makeher feelgood.Her facewasdull andgloomy.She wasstaring at the settingsun withoutan expressionon herface.But she was notan unhappychild likethis always.Six monthsbefore,Oshima wasa happychildwho lovedplaying atthe beachwith herbrother andsister.Her brotherMittsu usedto makesandcastleand Oshimaand hersister Osheencollected the sea shells.Her fatheralways shouted,“Come home,itslate”,but theywould notlisten.The seasidewas like their secondhome.At housealso,they wereahappy familywho alwayslaughed and played andhad noproblems tobother for.One dayall ofa suddensomething terriblehappened.A violenttsunami cameand tookthe entirecountryin itsgrip.It wasa hugenatural disaster.Most of the houseswere washedaway.The citiesandtowns wereflooded withwater.Oshimas townwas nearthe seaand sothe tsunamiflooded hertown aswell.Her housewas washedand theylost all their belongings.Her grandmotherMidori criedand criedand wastotally shocked.She has not seensuch destructionin her wholelife.They werehomeless.Oshima weptand weptand complainedthat whya violenttsunamihit hercity.She was very angry.（难民）The governmentshifted themto arefugee campwhere manyfamilies sharedthe livingspace.Helicopters droppedfood packetsand theyhad tostand inlong queueseven fordrinking water.Their lifehad turnedupside down.Oshima couldsee thesadness visibleinherparents*eyes.Now shedidnot likethe seaat alland alwaysfelt that the seahad brokenher trustand wasvery disappointedwith注意the waves.For herthe seawasverycruel whohad takenher beautifulhouse away.续写词数应为左右；
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150.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答2One dayOshima sawtwo little children playing in the camp withoutany traceof sadnesson theirface.A new ray of hope filled her spirits,making hercheer up.
一、续写中需要回答的问题
1.What didOshima thinkwhen shesaw the two children playingWhen Oshima saw thetwo littlechildren playingin the camp withoutany traceof sadness,she wasinitiallyconfused.She wonderedhow they could beso happyafter losingtheir homesjust likeeveryoneelse.How canthey laughandplaywhen everythingaround usis inruins”she thoughtto herself,feeling amix ofenvy andcuriosity.
2.How didthe childrensplay influenceOshimaThe childrensplay madeOshima startto reflecton her own attitude.She watchedthem buildingsmallstructures withwhatever materialsthey couldfind,their eyesshining withjoy.This sightgraduallymelted hercold heart.She realizedthat nomatter howdifficult thesituation was,there wasstill roomforhope andhappiness,inspiring herto changeher mindset.
3.What newhope didOshima findA newray of hope filled Oshimasspirits whenshe decidedto facelife positively.She beganto helpherfamily andothers in the camp.She alsostarted collectingitems tobuild somethinguseful,just likethechildren shesaw.She hopedthat witheveryone*s efforts,they couldrebuild theirlives andhomes oneday.
4.How didOshima*s view of the sea changeOshimasviewofthe sea changed fromone ofhatred anddisappointment toone ofacceptance.Shestarted toremember thehappy timesshe hadattheseaside beforethe tsunami.She realizedthattheseawas notentirely cruel;it wasjust apart ofnature.She couldstill findbeauty init andno longerblame itforalltheirmisfortunes.
5.What didOshima learnfrom thisexperienceOshima learnedthat lifeis fullof unexpectedchallenges,but oneshould never lose hope.She understoodthata positiveattitude canhelp overcomedifficulties.The experiencetaught herthe importanceof
二、故事主旨resilience and the power of findingjoy insmall thingseven in the toughestof times.故事通过小女孩Oshima在海啸灾难后从悲伤、愤怒到重拾希望的转变，展现了灾难给人们带来的巨大伤痛，同时传递出无论遭遇多大困境，都应保持积极乐观的心态，勇敢面对生活、心怀希望去战胜困难的主题
三、故事山开端Oshima坐在海边，神情忧郁，回忆起半年前海啸发生前一家人在海边快乐玩耍的温馨时光发展一场海啸摧毁了的家园，一家人成为难民，生活陷入困境，对大海Oshima Oshima充满怨恨与失望高潮（续写第一段）Oshima看到难民营中两个孩子快乐玩耍，开始反思自己的态度，内心逐渐发生转变结局（续写第二段）Oshima重拾希望，积极面对生活，对大海的态度也发生改变，领悟到面对困难应保持乐观的道理O
四、故事发展线索以Oshima的经历为线索，从海啸前的幸福生活，到海啸带来灾难后的痛苦与绝望，再到看到孩子玩耍后的内心触动，最后实现心态转变，按照时间顺序和情感变化推动故事发展
五、情感线索从0shima最初的悲伤、愤怒与对大海的失望，到看到孩子玩耍时的困惑、好奇，再到受到感染后的反思，最后转变为积极乐观、充满希望，情感变化细腻且层层递进
六、续写布局与框架第一段（One dayOshima sawtwo littlechildren playingin the camp withoutany traceof sadnesson their face.描述看到孩子玩耍时的内心感受和疑惑Oshima具体描写孩子玩耍的场景以及对的触动，引发她对自身态度的反思Oshima第二段（）A newray of hope filledher spirits,making hercheer up.阐述心态转变后采取的积极行动，如帮助家人和他人Oshima说明对大海态度的改变以及从这次经历中获得的感悟，点明故事主旨Oshima
七、续写注意事项承接原文承接上文Oshima在难民营中消极的生活状态，自然引出看到孩子玩耍这一情节，保持故事连贯性延续Oshima情感丰富、内心敏感的性格特点，合理展现她从困惑到反思再到转变的心理过程整体设计两段续写内容紧密关联，第一段着重描写外界因素对的影响，第二段聚焦Oshima Oshima自身的改变和感悟，使故事结构完整语言风格与原文一致，通过细腻的心理描写和场景描写增强故事的感染力巧妙设计以孩子无忧无虑的玩耍与的悲伤形成鲜明对比，突出转变的必要性和合理性Oshima用“大海”这一意象贯穿全文，从最初的怨恨对象到后来的重新接受，象征着心态Oshima的变化，深化主题
八、高分语句（呼应原文+高级句型）呼应原文Just asthe violenttsunami had once washedaway Oshimashappiness andhope,thesight ofthetwo children playingnow beganto washaway thebitterness inher heart,just likethe tides（呼应海啸带来灾难和大海的意象）gently erasingfootprints on the beach.高级句型It wasnot untilshe witnessedthe innocentjoy ofthe childrenthat Oshimatruly（强调句）understood thateven inthe darkestof times,a glimmerof hopecould lightup thepath ahead.高级句型With thenew-found hopewelling upinside her,Oshima notonly changedher attitude（复合结构）towards lifebut alsoinspired thosearound herto facethe difficultiesbravely,with高级句型The sea,which shehadonceregarded asa cruelenemy,now becamea reminderof boththepowerofnature andthe strengthofthehuman spiritto recoverand（非限制性定语从句）rebuild.
九、主题表达意义延伸直接引语点明主旨“Mom,I usedto hatethesea,but now1realize thatit*snotthesea*s fault.We canstill findhappinessand builda newlife,“Oshima said,her eyesfilled withdetermination.HNo matterwhathappens,we shouldneverlosehope.”促成转变，引发感悟This experiencecompletely transformedOshima.She wentfrom asad andangry girlto astrong-willed one.She startedorganizing smallactivities inthecampto lifteveryones spirits.Her storyspreadamong therefugees,giving themthe courageto facethe futureand believein abetter tomorrow.借象征物点明主旨The wavesthat onceseemed somenacing nowrolled gentlyonto theshore,as ifwhispering toOshimathat life,likethesea,has itsstorms but also itscalm,beautiful moments.And withhope inherheart,she wasready toembrace whatevercame next.
十、学生写作示范Paragraph one:One dayOshima sawtwo littlechildrenplayinginthecamp withoutany traceof sadnesson theirface.She watchedin disbeliefas theylaughed andbuilt tinyhouses withbroken piecesof woodand mud.Their eyessparkled withjoy,and theyseemed completelyunaware ofthe surroundingdespair.Oshimafelt apang ofenvy.How canthey beso happy”she murmuredto herself.But asshe keptwatching,shestarted tothink.She realizedthat theychose tofocus onthe funtheycouldhave,rather thanthe losstheyhad suffered.This madeher questionherownattitude ofalways beingsad andangry.Paragraph two:Anewrayofhopefilledher spirits,making hercheer up.Oshima decidedto change.She begantohelp hermother takecare ofthe youngerchildren inthecamp.She alsojoined thetwochildrenshe hadseenplaying andtogether theycollected materialsto makeuseful things.Slowly,she startedtoremember thehappy timesattheseaside beforethe tsunami.She walkedto thebeach one day,looking atthesea.The wavesseemed lesscruel now.She understoodthat lifewas fullof upsand downs,and sheshouldface itwith abrave heart.From thenon,Oshima becamea sourceofhopefor othersinthecamp,showing everyonethat therewas alwaysa reasonto smile.十一.【参考答案】八廿O-edayOshimasawlittlechildrenplayinginthecampwithout traceof sadnessontheirface.Oshima startedplaying withthem andwhile talkingthe kidstold herthat theyhad losttheir entirefamilyin thedisaster.The kidssaid,We usedto crya lotbut nowwe havestopped complainingand tryto behappyfbr whateverwe areleft with.,,Oshima wasshocked.She becamesilent.She hadher familyby herside,which wasindeed themost importantthing forher.A rayofhopefilledherspirits,making hercheer up.She wholeheartedlythanked Godfor keepingthemsafe.Oshima hadlearned anew meaningof satisfactionandthesmall childrentaught hera verybiglesson ina childsplay.The settingsun wasso beautiful,throwing theshiny raysonthemagnificent sea.Oshima wasviewing thesea withachangedperspective.From thatmoment on,shewasno morea tearyeyedbutagrateful soul.。
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