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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写一段英文，使之构成一篇的短文A QuietQingming in the JordanHouseholdThe Jordans,living roomfelt like a museumof unfinishedmoments.Rain tappedsoftly against thewindows,casting asilvery gloomover thecramped space.Ten-year-old Lilylay sprawledon thecarpet,her crayonsscreeching acrosspaper asshe drewjagged kitesand lopsidedtombstones.Beside her,six-year-old Maxshredded sheetsof printerpaper intoconfetti,tossing thefragments into the airlikeceremonial ghostmoney.Their parents,Mr.and Mrs.Jordan,sat atopposite endsof thesagging sofa,their facesilluminated by the coldglow of their phones.A forgottenspeaker playeda generic“springrenewaF,soundtrack-birdsong andtrickling water-that onlydeepened thesense of artificiality.Qingming Festivalhad alwaysbeen aday ofcrisp ritualsfor the Jordans.In yearspast,they wouldwakeearly,pack chrysanthemumsand orangesinto wovenbaskets,and drivetothehillside cemeterywhereMrs.Jordan9s grandparentsrested.The childrenwould chaseeach otheramong theheadstones,their laughtermingling withthe scentof burningincense.After tidyingthe graves,theyd picnicundercherry blossomtrees,their fingerssticky withQingtuan,the emerald-green ricedumplings filled withsweet bean paste.But thisyear,the forecasthad warnedof thunderstorms,and Mrs.Jordan,citingpracticality,“canceled thetrip.Well lightvirtual candleson the family appJ shedsaid,though noonehad botheredto login.Now,the absenceof traditionhung heavierthan the rain clouds.Lily glancedat hermother,whowas engrossedin alive streamofaKyoto cherryblossom festival.MomJ sheventured,holding upherdrawing-a stick-figure familystanding besidea tombstoneshed coloredneon pink.DoesGreat-Grandma likepink”“Hmm Sure,sweetie,Mrs.Jordan replied,her thumbflicking upwardin areflexive like.Mr.Jordan,meanwhile,scrolled throughan articletitled“The Digitizationof Grief:How ModernFamiliesHonor Ancestors.^^He pausedat aphoto ofa high-tech columbariumin Singapore,where QRcodesreplaced headstones.A notificationbuzzed-a reminderfrom hisfitness app:l,000steps todailygoal!”He stoodabruptly.Maybe weshould...take awalk”Max lobbeda paperball at the ceiling.Boring.”The roomlapsed backinto silence,broken onlybythecrinkle ofpaper and the tinnylaughter fromMrs.Jordans video.Outside,therainthickened,blurring theworld into a watercolorwash.Lilys crayonsnapped.This isthe worstQingming ever,“she announced,hurling thebroken stubacrossthe room.It struckthe family photo onthe mantel—a snapshotfrom lastyears gravevisit,their smilesbrightagainstthemisty hills.The clatterjolted Mrs.Jordan.She staredat thephoto,then ather children——Lily scowling,Maxnow dismantlinga sofacushion.Guilt prickledher throat.Closing herphone,she kneltbeside Lily.注意⑴续写词数应为个左右；150⑵请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答Paragraph1:What if...we make Qingtuan LikeGreat-Grandma taughtme^^Paragraph2:As dusksettled,the imperfectsteamed Qingtuanemerged.
一、续写中需要回答的问题
1.What didthe familydo afterMrs.Jordan suggestedmaking QingtuanAfterMrs.Jordan suggestedmaking Qingtuan,the wholefamily gotbusy.They gatheredingredientsfrom thekitchen.Mr.Jordan searchedfor therecipe onan oldpiece ofpaper thatGreat-Grandma hadwritten.Lily and Max washedtheir handseagerly andstood onchairs toreach thecounter.They mixedglutinousrice flourwith waterunder Mrs.Jordans guidance,and Lilycarefully addedthe greenfoodcoloring,her eyesshining withexcitement.
2.How didmaking Qingtuanchange the atmosphere in the roomMakingQingtuan transformedtheatmospherecompletely.The previoussilence andgloom werereplacedby laughterand chatter.As theyrolled the dough intoballs andfilled themwith sweetbeanpaste,they sharedstories aboutGreat-Grandma.Max tolda funnystory abouthow heonce droppedaQingtuan onthe groundduring apicnic,and everyoneburst intolaughter.The soundof theirvoices andthesmell of thedoughmade the room feelwarm andlively.
3.What didthe imperfectQingtuan looklikeThe imperfectsteamed Qingtuanhad arather unevenappearance.Some weremisshapen,with cracksonthe surface,and otherswere filledwith toomuch ortoo littlebean paste.One ofMaxs Qingtuanwas solopsidedthat itlooked likeit mighttopple over.But despitetheir flaws,they allhad asoft,inviting glow,and thegreen colorwas stillvivid,as ifcarrying thespirit ofspring.
4.How didthe familyfeel whenthey sawthe imperfectQingtuanWhen the family sawthe imperfectQingtuan,they felta mixof prideand joy.Mrs.Jordans eyeswerefilled with warmth asshe rememberedthe timeswhen shemade Qingtuanwith her grandmother.Mr.Jordan smiledand saidit wasthe mostspecial Qingtuanhe hadever seen.Lily andMax werebeamingwith pride,feeling asense ofaccomplishment forcreating somethingwith theirown hands.They allknewthat theseQingtuan werespecial notbecause of their appearance,but becauseof thememories andlovebehind them.
5.What didthe familylearn frommaking QingtuanThe family learnedthat traditionsdidnt haveto beperfect orcarried outin aspecific way.MakingQingtuan at home,although differentfrom theusual grave-visiting tradition,brought themclosertogether.They realizedthat the essence ofQingming Festivalwas aboutremembering andhonoringancestors,and sharing love within thefamily.It taughtthem thateven inmodern times,simple actsofcreating andsharing couldkeep thespirit oftraditions alive.
二、故事主旨故事通过乔丹一家在清明节因天气取消传统扫墓活动，从冷清、隔阂到因制作青团重拾节日氛围与家庭温暖的转变，揭示了在现代生活中，尽管传统习俗的形式可能因各种原因改变，但传承文化记忆、维系家庭情感的核心意义不应被忽视，强调了家庭团聚和传统延续的重要性
三、故事山开端乔丹一家在清明节当天因雷雨取消扫墓活动，家中氛围冷清、沉闷，成员们各自沉迷电子设备，孩子感到失落发展莉莉抱怨这是最糟糕的清明节，这引起了乔丹夫人的愧疚，她提议制作青团高潮（续写第一段）全家积极响应制作青团的提议，一起动手准备食材、制作青团,在过程中分享回忆，家庭氛围逐渐活跃起来结局续写第二段虽然制作的青团并不完美，但一家人感受到了温暖和快乐，领悟到传统的意义在于情感的传递与家庭的团聚
四、故事发展线索以清明节当天乔丹一家的活动和情感变化为线索，从取消传统扫墓活动后的冷清场景,到孩子的抱怨引发转变，再到制作青团过程中的互动，最后到青团制成后的感悟，按照时间顺序和事件因果关系推进故事
五、情感线索从一开始家庭的冷漠、隔阂，孩子们的失望、抱怨，到乔丹夫人的愧疚，再到制作青团过程中逐渐产生的期待、欢乐，最后收获温暖与感动，情感由冷到暖，层层递进
六、续写布局与框架第一段What if...we makeQingtuan LikeGreat-Grandma taughtme描述家人对制作青团提议的反应，大家积极行动起来准备材料具体描写制作青团的过程，加入家庭成员之间的互动和对话，体现氛围的转变第二段As dusksettled,the imperfectsteamed Qingtuanemerged.刻画不完美青团的外观，展现其独特之处描写家人看到青团后的感受和感悟，点明故事主旨，升华情感
七、续写注意事项承接原文承接上文乔丹夫人因孩子的抱怨产生的愧疚心理，自然引出制作青团的提议，保持情节的连贯性延续前文对家庭成员性格和状态的描写，如孩子们的活泼好动、父母对电子设备的依赖，在制作青团的过程中体现他们的改变整体设计两段续写内容紧密相连，第一段着重于制作青团的过程，展现家庭氛围的变化，第二段聚焦于青团制成后的情感升华，使故事结构完整语言风格与原文一致，通过细腻的细节描写和生动的对话，增强故事的感染力和可读性巧妙设计用制作青团这一行为作为家庭情感转变的关键，将传统习俗与家庭关系的修复巧妙结合以不完美的青团象征现代生活中传统传承的不完美状态，却依然能传递情感和意义,深化主题
八、高分语句（呼应原文+高级句型）呼应原文Just asthefamilyphoto onthe mantelhad oncecaptured theirhappy momentsat thecemetery,the act of making Qingtuan nowbegan tocapture new,precious memorieswithinthefour（呼应前文家庭照片和清明节walls of their living room,echoing thespirit ofthe QingmingFestival.传统）高级句型It wasnot untilMrs.Jordan proposedmaking Qingtuanthat thefamily trulyunderstoodthat sometimes,the mostmeaningful traditionscould becreated rightathome,inthesimplest ofways.（强调句）高级句型With flour dusting thecounter,laughter fillingthe air,and storiesflowing freely,the（复Jordans notonly madeQingtuan butalso mendedthe distancethat hadgrown betweenthem,with合结构）高级句型The misshapenQingtuan,which seemedso imperfectat firstglance,turned outto beaperfect symboloftheirrenewed familybond and the resilienceoftheirtraditions inthe faceof modern（非限制性定语从句）life.
九、主题表达意义延伸直接引语点明主旨“These Qingtuanmight notlook perfect/Mr.Jordan said,holding upa lopsideddumpling,“buttheyre filledwith loveand memories.Thafs whatQingming isall about.促成转变，引发感悟This simpleactofmakingQingtuancompletely changedthe familysperception oftraditions.Theyused tothink that traditions hadto becarried outin aspecific,grand way.But now,they realizedthat aslongas theywere together,sharingloveand memories,any activitycould becomea meaningfultradition.They startedto lookforward tocreating moresuch momentsinthefuture.借象征物点明主旨The greenglow ofthe Qingtuan,likeasmall beaconof hope,lit upthe roomand thefamilys hearts.It remindedthem thateven inthe midstof modernlifes chaosand changes,theessenceof traditionscouldstill shinethrough,connecting themto theirpast andto eachother.
十、学生写作示范Paragraph one:“What if...we makeQingtuan LikeGreat-Grandma taughtme Mrs.Jordan saidsoftly.Lilys eyeswidened,andMaxjumped upand down.Yes!Yes!”they shoutedin unison.Mr.Jordan putdown hisphoneand joinedthem.They rummagedthrough thekitchen cabinets,finding glutinousrice flourandsweet beanpaste.Mrs.Jordan showedthe childrenhow toknead thedough,and soontheir handswerecovered insticky greenpaste.As theyworked,Mrs.Jordan toldstories abouthow Great-Grandma usedtomakeQingtuanwith her.She alwayssaid thesecret ingredientwas loveJ Mrs.Jordan smiled.Theroom was filledwiththe soundof laughterand thesweet smellofthedough,replacing the earlier silence.Paragraph two:As dusksettled,the imperfectsteamed Qingtuanemerged.Some wereflattened,some wereunevenlycolored,but theyall smelleddelicious.The familysat aroundthe table,each holdingaQingtuan.To Great-Grandma/9Mrs.Jordan said,raising herQingtuan.And toour newtradition/9Mr.Jordan added.Lily tooka biteand smiled.This isthe bestQingming ever,^^she said.The familylookedat eachother andlaughed.In thatmoment,they knewthattraditionswerent aboutperfection;they wereaboutcoming together,sharing memories,and creatingnew ones.The rainoutside continuedto fall,butinside,theJordans,livingroomwasfilledwithwarmthand love.十一.【参考答案】Paragraph1:What if...we makeQingtuan LikeGreat-Grandma taughtme”Mrs.Jordans voicetrembledslightly,her eyessoftening asmemories ofhergrandmother^kitchen surfaced.The familyscrambledto theirfeet,gathering flour,mugwort,and sweetbeanpastefrom thepantry.Mrs.Jordanguided theirclumsy hands,laughing asLilys doughended upneon greenand Maxsdumplingsresembled misshapenrocks.The livingroom transformedintoachaotic workshop,flourdustingthe airlikesnow,andthegeneric springsoundtrack gaveway totheir chatterandtherhythmic thudof rollingpins.Paragraph2:As dusksettled,the imperfectsteamed Qingtuanemerged.The aromaof mugwortandwarmth filledtheroom,chasing awaytheearliergloom.Thefamilygathered aroundthe coffeetable,each takinga bite—Lily wrinklingher noseatthebitter edgeofthemugwort,Max declaringhis thebestever,“and Mr.and Mrs.Jordan sharinga quiet,knowing smile.Mrs.Jordan placeda Qingtuanon aplatebeside thefamilyphoto,whispering,For you,Grandma.The Jordansrealized traditiondidnt needgrandgestures—just sharedhands andheartfelt intentions.。
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