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读后续写祖孙两代之间的温情与技艺传承讲义一2025宁波高三二模读后续写详解阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文The(old包wor花ks)hop doorcreaked open.Clara walked in quietly.Her shoesstepped onwoodshavings Uthat sparkledin thesunlight.Through thedusty windows,the morninglightshone onGrandfathers roughhands.He wasgluing amaple chairleg.The wallcalendar stillshowed January.Its yellowedpages werecurling,just likedryleaves.An openorder booklay onthe desk.Februarys pagewas empty.There hadbeen noneworders sincemid-January.Clara heldher breathand recordedGrandfather withher phone.aShe,focused onhis quickhands as he measuredangles witha metalruler.This mighthelphimshe thought,eager toshow howskilled hewas.However,when sheposted the video online,negative commentsflooded in.Old waysfor adyingbusiness!No wonderthe businessis failing!Saddened,Clara deletedthe videoquickly.A spidercrawled overthe emptyorder book.Its blankpages showednot manypeople wantedhandmadethings thesedays.“Want tosee mytreas(ur草e图G]randpas voicebroke thesilence.He openeda leatheralbumfilled withpencil sketcheslike librarychairs from1958and parkbenches from
1962.Afaded ph(o弯to曲sli的pp)ed out:a smilingboy missingtwo teethwas grinningat thecamera,holding acurvedspoon proudly.“Timmy,my formerstudent/Grandfather smiled,touching thecurve ofthe spoonin thenphoto.Now hedesigns furniturefor tallbuildings.Last monthsnewspaper hadan articleabouthis curvedstairs.It wasinspired bythis veryspoon.He tappedthe photo,adding,Machines makethings fast,but handsremember stories//Clara lookedat thephoto—the curvedspoon,Timmys smile,and Grandpasyounghandwriting onthe back:Tim mysfirst repair,age
7.Beside her,fresh woodshavings wereshining.Stories mustbe toldClara murmured,taking outher phoneagain.This time,sheaimed toshare notjust thework,but thestory behindit.注意续写词数应为左右;L150,请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答2Paragraph1ParaTghreanpehx2t morning,Clara uploadeda newvideo.A weeklater,Timmy,now afamous furnituredesigner,walked inthe workshop.在与科技高速发展的今天,“代际鸿沟〃不只是理解问题,更是表达问题这篇读后续写聚焦了A祖I孙两代之间的温情与技艺传承,充满情感张力与思辨价值解题思路拆解题目主题:数字时代的“工艺传承”情感记忆〃核心价值是情感升华与工艺精神续写任务:从拿起手机”这一句起笔,延续情感线,完成爷爷手艺的情感传播,重建观众信心,并升华“为Cl时ar代a记忆与传承精神情节方向.第一段用新方式发布视频,这次加入“故事”元素,情绪转折点出现,观众反响逐渐积极Clara•第二段成名回访,亲自见证工艺的传承,强化爷爷价值,实现情感闭环Timmy框架写作第一段Clara重新发视频段首句(题干给定)01The nextmorning,Clara uploadeda newvideo.固定句(情感描写):A waveof nervousnessand hopesurged throughher as she hit the“Upload buttonagain.一展现内心的期待与担忧,奠定情绪基调Qara02不固定句(细节描写)This time,the videoopened withher grandfatherswrinkled hands polishing a spoon,followed bya voiceover:Every markhas amemory.”T用画面+旁白的方式突出“故事”元素03固定句(动作链推进)Upon checkingthe videostats anhour later,she refreshedthe page,read afew comments,and coveredher mouthin shock.T动作链推动情节,“点赞增长”与“观众反应”切入04不固定句(转折铺垫)One commentread,“Reminds meof mygrandpas workshop.Thank you.”Another said,Tdlove toorder one!一出现反转信号,引出积极情绪05固定句(情节转折)No soonerhad the video goneviral thanher inbox was flooded with messages ofadmiration andgratitude.T情节转折迅速展开,舆论扭转,升温气氛第二段Timmy回访工坊段首句(题干给定)A weeklater,Timmy,now afamous furnituredesigner,walked inthe workshop.06固定句(情感转变)Tears welledup in Grandpas eyes ashe recognized the boy he once taught to shape woodand heart.T用祖孙情升温情绪,同时完成“师徒”线索闭环07不固定句(背景渲染)Behind Timmystood acamera crewand abanner thatread“Craft StoriesProject:FromGrandpas Hands.”T场景渲染让“传承”显得更真实,呼应主题08不固定句(具体动作)Timmy walkedover,picked upthe curvedspoon fromthe shelf,and placedit gently into adisplaybox engravedwith Grandpasname.T动作描写具象化“致敬”行为09固定句(结局升华)By thetime theysat downto recorda video together,Clara knewthis wasno longerjustabout one workshop—it wasabout legacy.T升华故事意义,引出“代际共创”理念10固定句(主题点睛)This experiencetaught Clarathat thedigital worldcan preservenot onlyimages,but alsomemories,values,and dreams.T点题句收尾,完成全篇情感升华范文Paragraph1The nextmorning,Clara uploadeda newvideo.A waveof nervousnessand hopesurgedthrough herasshehitthe“Upload buttonagain.This time,thevideoopened withhergrandfathers wrinkledhandspolishingaspoon,followed bya voiceover:Every markhas amemory.Upon checkingthevideostats anhour later,she refreshedthe page,read afewcomments,and coveredher mouthin shock.One commentread,Reminds meof mygrandpasworkshop.Thank you.Another saidJTdlove toorder one!”No soonerhad thevideo goneviralthan herinboxwasfloodedwithmessagesofadmiration andgratitude.Paragraph2A weeklater,Timmy,now afamous furnituredesigner,walkedinthe workshop.Tearswelled upinGrandpaseyesasherecognizedtheboyheoncetaughttoshapewoodand heart.Behind Timmystood acamera crewand abanner thatread“Craft StoriesProject:FromGrandpas Hands//Timmy walkedover,picked upthe curvedspoon fromthe shelf,and placeditgentlyintoa displaybox engravedwith Grandpasname.By thetime theysat downto recordavideotogether,Clara knewthis wasno longerjust aboutoneworkshop—it wasabout legacy.This experiencetaught Clarathat thedigital worldcan preservenot onlyimages,but alsomemories,values,and dreams.。
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